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Ardra
04-15-02, 01:26 PM
ANOTHER LIFE

I feel it burning inside of me
A truth that won't go away
I try to douse the flames of emotion
But my efforts are in vain

I see myself, but I see someone else
I know my soul will never rest
It's slowly taking the measure of me
Oh God will I ever be free?

I try to make the best of what I have
Try to be the best I can be
Trapped inside these prison walls
My voice is raised in song and sorrow

In Another Life I'll be complete
Reborn as the one I was meant to be
In Another Life I'll find the key
To Happiness and realize my dreams

Wild colors and rotating lights
Escort me to thrilling heights
As darkness falls, I close my eyes
And walk in surreal landscapes

It's the place that I love to be
How wonderful to live and breathe!
I feel sensations new and strange
Kisses soft as down I'm seeking

I try to make the best of what I have
Try to be the best I can be
Trapped inside these prison walls
My voice is raised in song and sorrow

In Another Life I'll be complete
Reborn as the one I was meant to be
In Another Life I'll find the key
To Happiness and realize my dreams

I see in your eyes you're the One
And now the dream has just begun
And as you enfold and soothe me
I awake to harsh reality.

But in Another Life...




(copyright 1995 T.McDonald, all rights reserved)

Ardra
04-15-02, 01:27 PM
Greetings friends

new kid on the block here. Just thought I'd give you a little sample of my writing.

cheers!

Ardra

Orpheus42
04-15-02, 01:55 PM
Hey man, I like it! You have a recording?

Peace, Love, and Jesus Christ,

Jason

Ardra
04-15-02, 02:08 PM
Y'know I have stuff on cassette that I'm frankly too embarrassed to play for anybody. It's so crudely recorded and mixed.

I have CAKEWALK and SAMPLITUDE and am going to buy a drum machine and start recording on my PC as soon as.

When I have something that I think is decent I will gladly post a link to the mp3 or whatever.....

Avatarus
04-15-02, 02:08 PM
Yeah I agree with Jason... very nice :). I'm assuming this is a metal tune (just from what your prior musical influences are)... I definitely would love to hear it if there's a recording.

While I'm at it I might as well post the link to my website for my band (Jason, you've seen it already)... I have some MP3's of our songs there. The recordings are awful... so you'll have to bear with it if you listen to any of em. I think the best song up there is "Cataclysm" which is currently only an instrumental... but I'm working on some words. I unfortunately do not have the gift of writing good lyrics... so it's taking me a while. Anyways... I'll leave you with that... :). Good to find another metalhead around here... we are not the most popular peoples :). God bless

http://www.livingcatalyst.com/rictus/

Peace,

Mark

Ardra
04-15-02, 02:31 PM
Although you can't really see it here, lyrics are what I do best (smile).

This is the one I post publicly, which on the web is so easy for somebody to try and steal and say they wrote it. I have all my stuff copyrighted, but, well, you know.

So this is the one I sort of "give away" if you dig me.

Yes, it has music, although I listen to metal my own writing is a little more "stainless steel" I think.

Sort of a prog-metal style. I play guitar but I am really a singer, I only play enough to write chord changes and so forth behind my vocals. I do take pride in my singing and I don't really sing all that rough- it's hard on your voice!

Avatarus
04-15-02, 02:36 PM
I hear you Ardra... I am quite honestly terrible with vocals and writing lyrics... but I can play the guitar well, the piano amazing and I'm even better at the drums :). So I can write pretty good instrumentals... but never really good words to go along with them. So I love epic/melodic metal the best. I love throwing in organ and harpsichord and string synths along with my grinding guitar riffs for flavour. And just for the record... I don't like the monotone screeching in most metal... I find it incredibly dull and boring. I like metal guys who can sing... but still make it sound powerful... you know what I mean? I greatly enjoy James Hetfields brand of vocals... he's got a powerful and rough voice but can still sing along with the tunes (okay... maybe not from their first albums *lol*).

Mark

Orpheus42
04-15-02, 02:47 PM
Lately I've found myself doing better on lyrics than music, which is a change from the way I've always worked. I play several instruments and write in various styles (though lately I seem to be on a hard rock/funky acoustic kick... interesting combination *LOL*), and music has always come to me more easily. Lately I seem to be starting to figure out how to write more simple music that lends itself easier to lyrics, it makes things blend better I think. I'm a huge fan of old school Genesis, back from the prog days, and I dig Dream Theater. If you like prog but it doesn't necessarily have to be metal, you might check out Iona. They're a great band from the British Isles, have a distinct Celtic flavor to their music but with an edge. I love them, they're probably my favorite band right now.

Mark, what do you mean you can't sing along with Metallica's earlier albums? ;););) You should come down south and we should all jam :D

Peace, Love, and Jesus Christ,

Jason

Ardra
04-15-02, 03:05 PM
Hetfield...hmm....

well, this is one of those things where Mom told me not to say anything if I can't find anything good to say (hehe)

You know, at my web site I have created a pretty darn funny (if I might say so myself) thing where 20 of the most famous metal singers go head-to-head in a battle to the death.

Very much like Celebrity Deathmatch on MTV but this is my version hehehe.

Being that it is not profane or (I hope) objectionable, indeed is pure comedy, i will risk posting the link here:
www.geocities.com/planet_evenstar/main.html

If the mods want to remove my link, well ok email me and I will give you the link to it, but most metal fans have enjoyed my sillyness.

I think my favorite metal singers would include
Rob Halford (of course, he da man)
Bruce Dickinson (who only gets better with age)
Graham Bonnett (who is not very high profile anymore, but awesome singer nonetheless)
Ronnie James Dio
Joe Lynn Turner
Geoff Tate
Hmm the guy from Dream Theater is pretty good too...
"Midnight" from Crimson Glory....

Well there are so many. fun to talk about :p

Ardra
04-15-02, 03:07 PM
Iona sounds promising. I love all things Celtic sounding....

Have you guys heard BLIND GUARDIAN? They are mostly instrumental, and have set many of JRR Tolkien's ideas to music.

Hmm I think I will bring up JRR in a diff. thread.....

Orpheus42
04-15-02, 03:10 PM
Dude that's AWESOME!!! :biggrin::rofl::D

Ardra
04-15-02, 03:27 PM
you saw it ?

Orpheus42
04-15-02, 03:29 PM
Well, I'm finishing up the first round right now :)

Mustaine over Hetfield? I dunno about that one... well, when he threw in "Unforgiven" I have to agree ;) He shoulda went with Master of Puppets.

Ardra
04-15-02, 03:39 PM
There had to be 19 losers if there are 20 participating, so don't be discouraged when a favorite bites the dust hehehee.

And some (like that goober MM) are just there as tomata cans to get busted up, cause I said so.

(laugh)

Orpheus42
04-15-02, 03:45 PM
Gnome powers :rofl: Man, that was a trip. Thanks for sharing :)

Peace, Love, and Jesus Christ,

Jason

Ardra
04-15-02, 03:48 PM
i guess you saw the "victim" of the gnome powers now turned to stone down at the bottom eh? hehe. I just used a negative.

Orpheus42
04-15-02, 03:50 PM
Yeah, I liked that. I liked the way Halford disposed of him, too ;)

Ardra
04-15-02, 03:51 PM
Don't give it away!

Dang, you read fast......

Orpheus42
04-15-02, 04:00 PM
My lips are zipped! :biggrin:

Yeah, I went to a speed reading seminar and before we started I already read faster than anyone else did afterwards :rofl: I have to do a lot of reading in school, though, so it's definitely a gift from God.

Peace, Love, and Jesus Christ,

Jason

Ardra
04-15-02, 04:14 PM
Aw, you should savor the words like a good old fat steak....hehe

:p

Barney
04-16-02, 07:29 PM
here, here

Orpheus42
04-16-02, 11:19 PM
Charles Dickens- better than steak :biggrin:

Ardra
04-17-02, 03:24 PM
Dickens is good, but awful long-winded. David Copperfield is entirely too long....but lots of good works for sure....

'your fishin' pole gets rayther rusty don't it father?'

(laugh)